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a city in rhythm and jazz -.. by ~psychodrive:iconpsychodrive:



an entire city in tears
singing jazz and rhythm
and jazz and the blues,
singing rhythm & jazz & the blues.

an entire city in tears
walking asphalt
with hands held
                like walkways
between towers,
twisting the wind into whirlwinds of sound
& a red handkerchief flicking on the wind,
whipping & lifting the sound of the wind
& the necks of the crying
                in one motion, one
waving, swaying, lilting, loving manyperson,
singing rhythm & jazz & the blues.

an entire city in tears
craning from windows & weeping,
sweeping the dust dragged past the parks
with their eyes.
        with their eyes: dust-dragged
past the parks with woodchips & leaves.
        with their eyes: worshipping
the centre of a congregation of walking widows
& widowers, craned to the windows
wearing black pockets & white handkerchiefs.
white handkerchiefs pointing at windows
with each proud breath from the chests of the mourners,
defiant & proud as the man that they follow,
the man that they swallow & carry
in a loud, black box through the streets --
singing rhythm & jazz & the blues.

an entire city in tears
& smattered with rain.
faces & coats & umbrellas & an old dog
pooled in the tears of the clouds like cities,
drinking the sky & coating the ground
in faces & puddles & an old dog,
bedraggled & dragging behind the umbrella,
but both low & howling,
        low & coated,
faces pooling in black-leather-shoe shaped patches of asphalt
soon to be coated with the sighs
& the padding rhythm of the dog,
black shorn claws following that box
coating the patches with howling,
singing rhythm & jazz & the blues.


        but, i've got you, dog,
        claws beaten back
        by the shadows of umbrellas.

        i've got you, dog,
        if your bark becomes wooden
        & the city cannot see you.

        i've got you when your coat becomes matted
        with the stares of mourners from windows
        & you can't lift the first paw
        in your leap to that box.
        
        i'll be ready with opposable thumbs
        to open the lid & lift it, to lift those paws
        & the prints that you left in the asphalt.

        i've got you when your tongue has lolled long in the dirt
        & the mites you've collected
        are lighting bonfires in your chest
        with the splinters from every time you bark,
        & they're dancing there, slack & jumbled like
        your legs all those years ago. & now, joints clacking
        like lipless trumpets preparing the dirge,
        they're stomping the splinters with bloodless souls,
        open & pumping the air they release,
        pumping the air through their bodies,
        like lipless trumpets preparing the dirge
        singing rhythm & jazz & the blues.
©2006-2009 ~psychodrive
:iconpsychodrive:

Author's Comments

full title: "a city in rhythm & jazz & tears"

damn s.

go out and watch the bbc documentary series "dancing in the streets" now. or listen to a bunch of jazz and blues.

then read.

then comment.

thanks with grins go out to `youthculture, `darkcrescendo, =zebrazebrazebra & *salshep

& to martin luther king, the beatles, motown, ginsberg and the beeb, i tip my hat in a very hat-tippy manner.

Daily Deviation

Given 2007-01-09

a city in rhythm and jazz -.. by ~psychodrive is a smorgasbord of skillful repetition and rhythm, mixed with some powerful images. (Suggested by `bananaprincess and Featured by `PoeticWar)

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:icontiratwazuk:
wow

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The spirit is the purest part of your body
i don't wanna be banned for nothin mah sistahs
:iconnarabedla:
No time to read it, could you reply to this to remind me that I wanted to? ;P It just seemed so cool in the recently uploaded column...
:iconpsychodrive:
no problem. come back whenever you can.

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you're a writer? *fotoFRIDAY
<zebrazebrazebra>MY TUSHY IS CUSHY FOR THE PUSHY
:iconrober2:
I've always been a fan of the "thud" feeling of & in poetry.

There's something wickedly morbid about that last image - the dead dog with the mites n ticks n fleas singing and dancing inside it. I love it.

Anyway, I do not feel qualified to say anything too constructive about this, except, perhaps, that I like it.

--
And Louise holds a handful of rain, tempting you to defy it...
:iconpsychodrive:
qualifications are balls, say what you want to say.

thank you regardless. & yes, &. mmm. a bridge as opposed to a moat.

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you're a writer? *fotoFRIDAY
<zebrazebrazebra>MY TUSHY IS CUSHY FOR THE PUSHY
:iconrober2:
Ah. Well then, a warm sun as opposed to an atom bomb.

--
And Louise holds a handful of rain, tempting you to defy it...
:iconpsychodrive:
both are nuclear. i like it.

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you're a writer? *fotoFRIDAY
<zebrazebrazebra>MY TUSHY IS CUSHY FOR THE PUSHY
:iconrober2:
And really, who doesn't like nuclear power? Well, except from the Japanese. And the South Koreans.

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And Louise holds a handful of rain, tempting you to defy it...
:iconpsychodrive:
i live in australia. we supply x% of the world's uranium, where x is a number i'm not exactly sure of but i know is high enough to be scary.

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you're a writer? *fotoFRIDAY
<zebrazebrazebra>MY TUSHY IS CUSHY FOR THE PUSHY
:iconrober2:
According to Wikipedia you also sit on 40 % of the world's uranium reserves. Wow, you're like the Saudi-Arabia of uranium... Well, without the hand-chopping and stoning and horrible lack of human rights.

--
And Louise holds a handful of rain, tempting you to defy it...

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